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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby justTripn » Thu Oct 16, 2008 4:32 pm

evcake wrote::D Made it up m'self :D Seems, well, logical, though.
Do you think it's OK enough to submit? I've never been out of the poetry section...


Yes, please! Though, it's not my week. Still, I'd post that for you.

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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby justTripn » Thu Oct 16, 2008 4:38 pm

In respone to Aryell's cute story about how illogical Halloween is, I have a related true story. When The twins were in kindergarten, about a week after Halloween I found all this candy thrown in the wastebasket. I yelled at the boys for wasting and one of the twins says, "Oh sorry Mom, I thought those were just wrappers." Then the other one tattles on him and says, "I don't think that's true because I saw him do it, as as he was dumping the candy, I heard him say 'Halloween is ruining my life'." LOL

He was dumping his candy because he couldn't stop eating it! :lol:

"Halloween is ruining my life." :( :lol:
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Asso » Thu Oct 16, 2008 6:11 pm

justTripn wrote: Asso, why not submit yours to the poetry section?

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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Aquarius » Sun Oct 19, 2008 8:09 pm

Wow, am I ever late to respond! Thanks evake and Asso for joining the party! :D The more, the merrier!

Just putting some polishing touches on mine, and I hope to post it in the next day or so. Wish me luck!
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Escriba » Sun Oct 19, 2008 9:23 pm

Aryell, cute and funny. T'Pol mentioning Superman and his "special" attire made me burst out laughing :thumbsup:

evake, yours is very touching and I simply love T'Pol's logic so wonderfully developed (that's hard, you know).

Asso, when you write about feelings and Destiny you get to touch my subconscious :)
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Aquarius » Mon Oct 20, 2008 3:06 am

Okey-dokey. Here's mine. If it's not obvious, I went with "treat." :wink:

Just wanna shout a thanks to Eian and my good pal Sandy for betaing for me, and for putting a blowtorch under my ass. :lol:

As always, constructive feedback is welcome...but be gentle with me, 'kay? This is only my second pass at writing TnT, and this time I don't have the shroud of humor or a ridiculous situation to hide behind. :shock:

BTW, in a fit of frustration, I almost renamed this thing "Fork You, Too." Don't ask, you'll understand when it's over.




Calculating the Precise Value of Pie
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CHARACTERS: Trip/T'Pol
SETTING: Sometime after Season Four, ignoring The Abomination
GENRE: Romance
RATING: PG for ass-scratching. (Don't ask.)
SUMMARY: Trip and T'Pol meet halfway, over pie.
DISCLAIMER: The characters and situations this story is based on are the property of CBS/Paramount. I just borrowed them for a minute. What I did with them, however, is mine and mine alone. This is a labor of love. Nobody made any money off of this. As if!



"C'mon," Trip urged playfully. "Open up."

T'Pol gazed dubiously at the forkful of brownish-orange cream, flaky crust, and fluffy white topping. Trip's practiced eye didn't miss the war between trepidation and desire percolating beneath her orderly veneer—or the refusal that would be forthcoming.

Damn. He'd almost had her this time.

"Vulcans…" T'Pol trailed off, barely masking her surprise when Trip pulled the fork away and shoveled its tasty burden into his own mouth.

"Vulcans don't share food," Trip recited begrudgingly before swallowing. "I know. But humans do, darlin', 'specially when they're crazy 'bout the one they're sharing it with." He looked at her hopefully as he scooped up another forkful and dangled it in front of her.

T'Pol watched the fork closely, lest it make a sudden move. "It's very…intimate." It was more than an observation, but less than a protest.

Trip put the fork down and gestured widely around the room—the soft candlelight, the floor pillows he and T'Pol were snuggled into, and a night that promised more intimacies than even a slice of Chef's decadent pumpkin pie could possibly inspire—an unspoken "Hello, aren't WE intimate?"

"There's only one fork," she countered.

"You let me kiss you," Trip pointed out. "What's the difference?"

"It is illogical to infer that there is a reciprocal relationship between sexuality and the sharing of food, or a utensil."

Trip stifled an incredulous laugh. "Boy, you people are really missing out!" He sighed. "I don't get it. The way you tell it, we're about as married as you can get by Vulcan standards, 'specially since this happened all by itself." He tapped a finger to his temple, as he often did to indicate the telepathic mating bond that had spontaneously formed between them.

T'Pol inclined her head. "Indeed."

"Well, don't Vulcan couples eventually do things with each other that they don't do in public?"

"Obviously." She rewarded Trip with a raised eyebrow.

Trip grinned in spite of himself. "Well, I wasn't talkin' about that. But don't married people on your planet ever let their guard down in front of each other, when no one else is around? Stuff like…I don't know…drinking milk right out of the carton, or scratching their asses?"

Before T'Pol could open her mouth to refute such absurd and distasteful notions, Trip cut her off with a dismissive wave.

"Never mind. Let me guess: Vulcans don't scratch their asses, either."

Trip felt his frustration wane as T'Pol brushed a concerned hand across his cheek. "What's wrong?"

Though T'Pol could've easily reached into their bond and found the answer herself, Trip was grateful that she always allowed him to express himself, in his own time and on his own terms. "It just doesn't make any sense. I can share the rest of my life with you without it making you any less Vulcan…but I can't share a stupid piece of pie, and you're the one person I wanna share everything with—even when there's only one fork."

On one hand, Trip knew just what he was asking of T'Pol. Social norms in her culture dictated that sharing food from someone else's plate, let alone using the same utensil, was taboo. She had spent her entire life believing that such a thing was unseemly and unthinkable.

On the other…

"Look," he said, placing his hand over hers and giving it a squeeze. "I'm not tryin' to change who you are. It's just…the rules keep changin', you know? You kiss me in an empty corridor. You touch my hand when no one's lookin'. And I'd never ask for any of it. I know you do it because you love me, and it means the world." He gestured around the room again. "What I don't get is why the rules matter in here, when it's just you and me. We're not human or Vulcan. We're both, and we're something completely different—something more."

After a moment of consideration, T'Pol opened her mouth but said nothing. At Trip's quizzical expression, she glanced meaningfully from the plate and back.

"You sure, darlin'?"

A grin tugged at the corner of Trip's mouth as T'Pol leaned in expectantly. Trip picked up the fork and carved off another bite of pie. He felt a rush of warmth as he watched her full lips close over the fork and slide off, a nearly imperceptible look of surprise moving over her face as she considered the alien combination of sweetness and spice on her tongue.

"Fascinating," she murmured when she finally spoke.

Pulling her closer, Trip pressed a kiss into her hair. Even without a telepathic bond, he couldn't imagine feeling closer to any other woman. Ever. Even the smallest things most humans would take for granted were intimate to Vulcans—to T'Pol. Since she'd come into his life, Trip had a new perspective on what was meaningful and important, and he loved that the most about being with her.

T'Pol's cool voice finally brought his meandering thoughts back into the room.

"Is it customary on your world to share only one bite?"



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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Alelou » Mon Oct 20, 2008 12:06 pm

:D That's a great last line! Very nice.
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby krn » Mon Oct 20, 2008 12:17 pm

Great story! I really enjoyed your characterizations - spot on! You relly need to stop fretting about writing TnT - you've got it down.
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby mjimeyg » Mon Oct 20, 2008 12:24 pm

Vulcans... no emotions... plenty of sarcasm and cheek!

Loved it. :D

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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Distracted » Mon Oct 20, 2008 1:02 pm

Very cute. Well done. 8)
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Eian Flannagan » Mon Oct 20, 2008 2:03 pm

krn wrote:Great story! I really enjoyed your characterizations - spot on! You relly need to stop fretting about writing TnT - you've got it down.

Great job, lass!

krn is correct. Your characterizations are incredibly grand! And you can stop with the fretting.

While I don't necessarily agree with the theme, the story is quite entertaining. The mark of a great writer? The ability to confound and entertain simultaneously.

Also, as one who enjoys writing Vulcan wit, I applaud that last line. Brava!

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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby justTripn » Mon Oct 20, 2008 3:16 pm

*Big SMILE* Aquarius. Any chance you'll submit that one to Triaxian Silk, too? Evcake? Since I'm soliciting them, I'll post them, . . . in a few days. After my story gets a chance to sit at the top. :?
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Aquarius » Mon Oct 20, 2008 3:52 pm

Thanks, everyone! :D

About the fretting, here's the thing: One, I'm still new to the fandom, and two, I still haven't seen all the episodes yet. So, while something about this show and these characters has resonated with me and made me feel like I have something to say about it, I still feel a little "behind," if you know what I mean, like you all are privy to secrets that I haven't found out yet. Because, well, in a way you are, lol! :lol: So while I'm working with a beta reader (and he's remarkably patient!), it's still sorta hard to write and post confidently when I don't know some of what's in canon that could totally negate what I'm seeing in my head...hence my anxiety. :wink: You all are wonderful confidence-boosters, though, and for that I thank you! :D Once I've seen most of the episodes and have had a few "successes" under my belt, I'm sure I'll feel more of a sense of "Yeah, I've got this." 8)

jT--thanks! I'd love to submit it...but later, when I'm less sleep deprived and have more patience for the HTML monster. :lol:

Thanks again, everyone. Glad you liked it.
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby Asso » Mon Oct 20, 2008 4:42 pm

I'm late Aquarius, but I want to tell you I found your little piece very, very nice!
It has a great deal of subtle nuances. Very well done!
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Re: October '08 Word Prompt! :)

Postby evcake » Mon Oct 20, 2008 5:02 pm

:D Very nice, Aquarius :D
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