Alelou wrote:Chekhov guns, Schmekhov guns. I just want you to KEEP THE CHAPTERS COMING.
*salute
* Yes, ma'am. Immediately, ma,am.
honeybee wrote:Loved your last chapter - and I thought about your AU when I was writing my MU - thinking about the essential traits that make up the characters - and how even under radically different circumstances, some things about the different characters will remain the same.
Oh, thanks. I must admit that in a cowardly movement I haven't begun your MU story, just because you write so well that I don't want to be intoxicated and then write something similar.
michelle wrote:The Vulcan/human dislike of each other is a touch on the weak side, for me however. Then again, this isn't the MU so i'm imagining that even though there was a falling out between vulcan and earth at some time, it wasn't because humans were blood thirsty, power hungry maniacs, so i'm guessing that both sides do have that peace loving and getting along element that is seen in the original universe, so perhaps it does make sense. But I think the war should have cultivated just a little more bitterness between the two sides, perhaps there is but it's not quite coming across just yet.
Interesting. I didn't want to exaggerate the hate and distrut between Humans and Vulcans, so maybe I came as too soft. There is going to be a bit more about the hate and the political enviroment in chapters 13 and 14.
On the other hand, the view of the war we have in the story comes from individual characters that are in the front, almost all of them isolated from the population and the power center, and each one with his/her own take. And in that sense:
- Archer is the only one with a
personal grudge against Vulcans (that perhaps it's been more told than showed, but it will have influence in the future.)
- Travis is very... neutral about it. And possibly he could have more against Andorians than Vulcans. But that, too, is a story for the future.
- Trip has absolutely no personal resentment against Vulcans (I tried to leave it very clear), and has his RU good nature intact in the AU. So much that he still feels guilty for his rage against a Vulcan soldier.
- T'Pol is a little sickened by the war. Even if, as Archer, she has a personal grudge against Humans, she is Vulcan and a professional. Besides, we've seen that there are things about the High Command she doesn't like.
- Soval is trying to save his species, he has no time for hate, frankly.
- Hoshi... Oh, yes, the Japanese Hoshi... We haven't seen her in front of a Vulcan yet. Who knows what could happen then.
- Erika saw her marriage ruined because the irrational hate against Vulcans. She could have blamed Vulcans for it, but Erika is the type of person that has a deep awareness of reality.
- Malcolm... Malcolm is a soldier. We'll see more of him in chapter 13, but don't expect deep feelings of any kind towards the enemy. The enemy is the enemy, and that's all.
The plot is very character-driven and there are (and there will be) situations when their feelings and their beliefs would reveal a little of the general enviroment, but still the story will suffer of a too personal approach of the war, more than a generic one (even with the mentions to Paxton, the genocide perpetrated by the Vulcans or the distrust of the Humans as a spur for the war here and there.)